學生Nancy與Aplus美語老師的email修改課程－aplusenglish的部落格

以下為學生Nancy請Aplus美語的老師幫忙修改的信件內容：

Dear Steve,

Today, I spent about two hours writing a list as to what I’m going to bring to my dorm. As soon as I finished the writing, I suddenly (= abruptly = all of a sudden) realized that there were huge amounts of things waiting for me to carry to my dorm. What’s even worse, (Actually, there will be two ways of depictions in describing this sort of stressful description: “Even worse” and "The worst is, S + V + O.") (By the way, please bear in mind that “even”, an adverb, can merely used in a comparative statement, rather than in a superlative statement, in which “The worst is,” is employed.) the school said that there would (Since the auxiliary, would, is connected to the main clause where a past tense is used, you have to use a past tense of auxiliary. Complicated, isn’t it?) be a percentage as to freshman who can’t own a dorm. (Note that “ as to” only serves as a prepositional phrase, unable to be followed by a full clause, for it is not viewed as a conjunction specially tailored to be followed by a full clause.). Thus, (Right here, a comma is absolutely needed because there is an interval prior to describing the next sentence that follows.) some of us have to rent a suit rather than staying in the dorm which is near (Since “near” can function as a preposition good enough to accept the object, the campus, that follows, there is no need to place an unnecessary preposition called “to.”)the campus. Apart from the dorm issues, actually I was a bit nervous about leaving my home city while starting a brand new academic career in Taipei, not only because Taichung was my home city, but also due to a new environment where I have no one I am familiar with. (In modifying a place, you are strongly prohibited from using a relative pronoun called “that”. Instead, another relative pronoun called “where” is highly recommended. Meanwhile, in terms of using “familiar with” or “familiar to,” you have to have a full-scale understanding regarding their very distinction. That is, if you intend to use “familiar to”, you may write like this: where I have no one familiar to me, or where I have no one I am familiar with. I hope that I have made my points clear to you.) Though this challenge has freaked me out, yet I’m quite certain that I’ll break through those terrifying straits and frame myself a vivid life in college.

以下為Steve老師修改完之後回信給學生Nancy的信件內容：

Dear Nancy,

Soon, you will throw yourself completely to a strange place unfamiliar to you, a great unprecedented experience to you, indeed. As I have repeatedly proclaimed in my lectures delivered in Aplus, never should we confront our life with sense of fear, a negative element to us. Rather, we ought to remain adamant in believing what we can achieve - regardless of where we stay. Your exposure to a totally strange setting may help enhance your adaptability and greatest flexibility, the function of which may further elevate your experiences and knowledge in dealing with others. College, in my definition, can be referred to as a turning point necessary for further metamorphosis as a prerequisite for your intended prospective future career, thus in need of your complete comprehension as to why you have to enter a college. But unfortunately, many students fail to make use of this great opportunity to go through a thorough learning career because of the absence of their aims. As a consequence, lots of precious time will be squandered without being noticed. Only when they face the job market will they become fully aware that their immature concepts added with their silly activities are the source of their obstacles faced. In light of this, you are highly recommended not to follow their footsteps; instead, you have to identify your short-term objective with which to make more complete and more fruitful your study career.

Steve LIN

以上是學生Nancy請Aplus美語寫作課程老師幫忙修改的作文練習，藉由運用老師上課所提到的文法結構，以及重要的單字片語，Nancy同學已經能在短時間內詳細且有條理的論述自己的觀點，並且豐富運用老師所授與的文法結構，讓整篇文章看起來更臻成熟。不論是升學考試的英文科所要求的寫作測驗，或是現在各大企業的就業面試，都視英語能力為篩選求職者的重要條件之一，再看似大家都會英文的社會中，如何脫穎而出；或是在研究所時如何撰寫、解讀論文，英文能力強的人比較吃香已是不可否認的事實，在職場上的E-mail商業書信、英文簡報、和外國客戶溝通交談...等，或是對研究所的論文的撰寫及理解，又或是高中職的學測指考、統測所要求的英文作文，Aplus美語都有一系列的課程供您選擇，除了寫作的訓練，再加上口語的練習，我們的目標是讓您能在眾多的職場競爭者中或是各大考試中脫穎而出，參加Aplus美語的課程，讓您的英文能力從無到有，讓Aplus美語在您即將決定之後職場或就學生涯的重要時刻，成為您的重要推手！

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